Hey! Why Such Long Sales Pages?

So, you get one of those emails from someone whose business you kinda like. And it’s got some enticing little message in it- so you click to take a look at the offer.

And suddenly you find yourself in highlighter land. Broad streaks of yellow, lots of exclamation points, and pages and pages of words making all kinds of claims and promises. And when you scroll allllllll the way down to the bottom, there isn’t even a price. You need to click on an ‘order now’ button before they even tell you the price.

Steaming, you swear by all that is holy that you will never, ever subject your customers to that kind of nonsense.

So when you go to sell your own offer, say for instance a seminar, you write up a simple, clear paragraph or two about it, add few bullet points, and an understated offer. And hardly anyone responds. Oy!

Do you have to be hyper-hypey to get customers?

Let’s get clear: these sales pages are there to do one thing… and it’s not selling. Nope, they aren’t selling. So, what are those pages doing?

Those pages are holding a conversation with the reader. What conversation? The same conversation you would hold if you were trying to fill a seminar, and someone who was interested called you to ask about it.

I’ve had plenty of those conversations, and I bet you have, too. How long are you on the phone? Twenty minutes? Thirty minutes? An hour?

Time flies when you’re connecting heart-to-heart.

Have you ever read Shakespeare?

Remember studying plays in grade school? Your middle school Arts and Literature teacher Mr. Snyder tells you, “Read through page 61 of Romeo and Juliet for Monday.” And the class groans- 61 pages by Monday!

Yup, 61 pages. The first half of the book.

How long is 61 pages?

I believe it takes about two or three hours to play out Romeo and Juliet on the stage. The Folger Shakespeare Library edition is 245 pages, but every other page has historical notes. So we’ll just count half. 122 pages.

Let’s be generous, and say 122 pages in three hours. 40 pages an hour. 20 pages in thirty minutes.

How long was your sales page again? Three paragraphs and five bullet points? Well, you’ve just had the equivalent of a 45-second conversation with your reader.

“Uh, yeah, I’ve got 45-seconds to tell you about the seminar, and then I gotta go.”

Not very generous or helpful to your caller, eh?

You can still put away the yellow highlighters.

No, you don’t have to write pages and pages of fluff, full of hype and yellow highlighters. But, you have to give me, your potential customer, more than 45 seconds.

How much more? Here are a few pointers:

Keys to Writing Your Offer

• Find the questions.

In the Opening the Moneyflow class, one of my clients took thirty seconds to describe an upcoming seminar- and then the other class members let loose. Question after question after concern after concern. Many of which my client hadn’t considered before.

Describe your offer, in less than a minute, to people in your target market, and then ask for any and all questions that come up, no matter how oddball. The answers to all of those questions need to be woven into your offer description.

• Make the concrete very clear.

There are logistical facts about your offer- price, what’s included, location, time, quantity, materials, etc, etc. Put all of those in a box that is very easy to find and read. And put them at the bottom.

Because the written format is static, it’s hard to present the information in one way that everyone is going to like. If you put the information at the top, it’s like putting a big price sticker over something, so they can’t even see what it is. You have to peel back the price before you even know what you’re looking at- that’s not really fair to either party.

If the information is in the middle- it can be hard to find. So put it at the end- easily accessible, right out in the open, but not in the way.

• Start with empathy.

Before you get into describing your offer, and the benefits, use a paragraph or so at the beginning to create empathy for the problem that your offer solves. For instance, if you help people who have chronic pain, spend a few sentences describing what it’s like to live with chronic pain, so your readers feel seen and understood.

Then they’ll have more space to hear what you want to tell them about it.

These are just a few pieces that can help your offers connect more strongly to your readers. Find successful sales pages from people you respect, and print them out. Study them carefully. See if you can find 10 or 20 things that you notice about those pages.

And give it a shot yourself. Don’t be afraid to wander into having a longer page, knowing that the people who really need what you are offering WANT the information, and may read it word-for-word several times.

Share- how do you feel about those long sales pages?